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[雅思] 让 AI 帮我批改雅思 C19-Test 1 Part 1 作文

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HelloWorld 发表于 2024-10-29 07:43:40 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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题目:
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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预估得分:
GPT-4o:5.0-5.5
Claude 3.5 Sonnet(New): 5.5-6.0
Copilot:5.5-6.0
Gemini:6.0-7.0

整体建议都是需要改正拼写和语法错误,增加连接词让文章更流畅

我的作文让 Claude 改进拼写和语法错误

The line graph illustrated the numbers of participants for various kinds of activities at a specific social centre in Melbourne, Australia throughout 2000 to 2020.

Some of them kept a steady number of participant during these years, some increased repidly even grew from 0, in contract, there are one activity saw a significant decline.

The most impressed data from the chart is film club, it stayed in the top welcomed activity with a top members. Martial arts began as the second one at 2000, and showed a relatively slight changes, placing it the third one in 2020. Amateur dramatics, although ranked as the third one out of five in the beginning, it experienced a sharp decline from 2005 and settled at the last one in the end of 2020.

There are two activities saw significant risese, one is the table tennis, which placed in the fourth out of the five, but claimed fastly after 2010, ending the second one with about 53 participants. Musical performances, begin with 0, increased to near 20 participants in 2020.

The line graph illustrates the numbers of participants for various kinds of activities at a specific social centre in Melbourne, Australia throughout 2000 to 2020.

Some of them kept a steady number of participants during these years, some increased rapidly and even grew from 0, in contrast, there was one activity that saw a significant decline.

The most impressive data from the chart is the film club, which stayed as the top welcomed activity with the highest number of members. Martial arts began as the second most popular activity at 2000, and showed relatively slight changes, placing it as the third one in 2020. Amateur dramatics, although ranked as the third one out of five in the beginning, it experienced a sharp decline from 2005 and settled as the last one at the end of 2020.

There are two activities that saw significant rises, one is the table tennis, which was placed as the fourth out of the five, but climbed rapidly after 2010, ending as the second most popular activity with about 53 participants. Musical performances, beginning with 0, increased to near 20 participants in 2020.

改进后 claude 预估 6.0-6.5 分

GPT 7 分范文:

The line graph displays the number of participants engaging in five different activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia, over a 20-year period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club consistently attracted the most participants, while amateur dramatics saw a dramatic decrease in popularity. Table tennis and musical performances experienced significant growth, with musical performances starting from zero, whereas martial arts remained relatively stable.

In 2000, the film club had the highest number of participants at approximately 70, a figure that remained relatively steady throughout the period, making it the most popular activity each year. Martial arts followed as the second most popular activity, beginning at around 40 participants and experiencing only minor fluctuations before ending with about the same number in 2020, placing it in third position.

Conversely, amateur dramatics initially attracted around 35 participants but witnessed a steep decline after 2005, falling to less than 10 by 2020, the lowest of all activities. In contrast, table tennis, which started with only a few participants, saw a significant surge from 2010, reaching over 50 participants by 2020, ranking second overall. Musical performances, with no participants in 2000, gradually gained popularity, attracting nearly 20 participants by the end of the period.


Claude 7 分范文:

The line graph presents data about participation levels in five different activities at a Melbourne social centre over a 20-year period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, while some activities maintained relatively stable participation rates, others experienced significant changes, with table tennis showing the most dramatic increase and amateur dramatics displaying a notable decline. Throughout the period, film club consistently remained the most popular activity.

Film club maintained the highest attendance, fluctuating between approximately 60 and 65 participants throughout the two decades. Despite minor variations, particularly a slight dip to around 59 participants in 2010, it demonstrated remarkable stability in its popularity. Similarly, martial arts showed moderate stability, maintaining between 30 to 40 participants, though it lost its position as the second most popular activity by 2020.

The most striking trend was observed in table tennis participation, which rose substantially from about 15 participants in 2000 to over 50 by 2020, making it the second most popular activity by the end of the period. In contrast, amateur dramatics experienced a continuous decline from about 25 participants in 2000 to fewer than 10 by 2020. Musical performances, which had no participants in 2000, showed steady growth, reaching approximately 18 participants by 2020.


Copilot 7 分范文:

The line graph illustrates the number of participants for various activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020. It is clear that while some activities maintained a steady participation rate, others experienced significant fluctuations, including both rapid growth and decline.

One of the most notable features of the graph is the consistent popularity of the film club, which had the highest number of participants throughout the entire period. Starting with a substantial lead in 2000, it remained the most popular activity with a relatively steady number of members. Martial arts, which began as the second most popular activity in 2000, exhibited only minor changes over the years, ultimately ranking third in 2020.

In contrast, amateur dramatics, initially the third most popular activity, experienced a sharp decline in participation from 2005 onwards, becoming the least popular activity by 2020. On the other hand, table tennis saw a significant increase in popularity, especially after 2010, moving from the fourth position to the second by the end of the period, with around 53 participants.

Musical performances, which had no participants at the start in 2000, showed a gradual but steady increase, reaching nearly 20 participants by 2020. This indicates a growing interest in musical activities over the 20-year period.

In summary, while the film club consistently attracted the highest number of participants, other activities like table tennis and musical performances showed significant gains. Meanwhile, amateur dramatics saw a notable decline, reflecting changing preferences at the social center over the two decades.

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